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I felt for it, as he had taught me, and gripped it with mental fingers–it shied away from my touch, slipped and trickled through my grasp–but I relented, and gripped it harder. Then, as I slowly began to draw it out, it stopped–as always, it collided with the invisible wall it inevitably did: My humanity.
I sighed, opening my eyes, “I can’t.”
His smile widened, the hope still shining in his eyes. “Yes you can, Falcon, you are Amaranthine, it is in your blood–you have it, but you must learn to harness it.”
I looked back at the plant–if anything, it looked sicker than it had before. I fought a groan of frustration–I knew Asa only wanted what was best for me, he wanted to be proud of me, to have someone to share that part of himself with, but I was useless. The human half of me tainted my magic the same way the sludge tainted the plant–and this taint Asa couldn’t fix.
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Only one post left for the first chapter! Hope you like it so far 🙂 I can’t wait to finish this chapter, and hopefully show y’all some snippets from my new WIP. Looking forward to hearing your thoughts, and seeing your posts this week. Thanks for stopping by, and happy 8sunday!
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I have a feeling that once she gets her confidence, nothing is going to hold her back! I could feel her frustration, nice job.
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That would certainly help! Thank you 🙂
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Interesting. I certainly feel the character’s despair! Can’t wait for more, terrific snippet!
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Thank you, I’m glad you could 🙂 And thanks!
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Another great snippet. You do an awesome job of describing her struggle with the magic and her inner turmoil.
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Thank you! Thanks for stopping by
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Love this part! A lot! It really captures me – I love the inner struggle depicted.
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Thank you 🙂 I’m glad it did
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So defeatist…but her struggle is palpable. I hope she’s able to find the strength and will to do what is a part of her.
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Thank you 🙂 I hope so too! 😉
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Oh, that explains the problem with the magic. The image of humanity being like sludge is a bit sad… I hope Falcon realizes that’s not true soon!
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Haha, yes it does 🙂 I’ve never thought of it like that but it is kinda sad… Thanks for stopping by!
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Fluid. Packed with emotion. And it really works at building her character. Nicely done!
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Thank you so much!
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lovely!
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Thank you 🙂
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