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This is a direct continuation from last week’s snippet (here). In this scene, Falcon has been captured by the Helyx gang and is being harvested for her Amaranthine magic. Creative punctuation has been used to fit into the eight sentences.
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“What do you want?” I hissed through clenched teeth, “I’m not with Crank anymore.”
“Yeah, I know, got yourself a pretty little family now–But this has nothing to do with Crank, I only want you.”
“If you’re going to kill me, just get it over with–You get nothing out of torturing me.”
A snake of a smile crept across his lips, “Oh I’m not torturing you, but you’ve been keeping that precious magic of yours all to yourself–It’s rude not to share, ya know.”
The other thugs laughed, too hard–Eager to please their master. They were weak, nothing more than sheep following a wolf, but I knew just the monster that Scar was. I’d seen the marks he used to leave on the other girls–Being Crank’s Pet was the only thing that had saved me from him. But there was nothing to save me now.
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Thanks for reading! I will continue this scene next week, so I hope you stop by. I look forward to reading all your amazing posts this week! Happy 8sunday 🙂
Blog Post and Novel Excerpt © Victoria Davenport and the Coffee.Write.Repeat. blog
Hope you’ve had a great Christmas!
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Uh-oh! Way to ratchet up the tension! Great snippet, as ever! =D
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Haha, thank you so much! 🙂
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Oh, that’s not a good situation for her. You’ve put her in the hot seat! Great snippet!
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It definitely isnt! Thank you 🙂
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Oh my, the situation is getting desperate! He does sound like a monster. Great tension, Victoria. Is this story finished? Do you know about ABNA?
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It is, and he is! Thank you 🙂 yes, it is a snippet from my novel EMBER which I have out on submissions right now. No I do not! What is it?
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Tense situation indeed and getting worse by the moment! Excellent excerpt – I’m hooked!
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Thank you very much! 🙂
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Excellent tension! Love it.
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Thank you! 🙂
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TENSION! Good bad guys make good stories, and it sounds like a good story from this snippet. Especially liked the line “a snake of a smile”…nice snippet.
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Great tension here- this is a very interesting story!
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Great snippet Victoria. Love the tension ❤ The dark threat of the marks Scar left on the other girls is very menacing and adds a lot of interest. ❤
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