Hey there! Sad day, since this is my last snippet before summer since spring semester has started. It’s been great to be back over break, thanks so much for everything! To meet some new authors, read some great writing, or join in the 8-sentence fun, stop by at Weekend Writing Warriors!
This is a continuation from last week’s snippet (here), though I have skipped some paragraphs and rearranged for the sake of snippet flow. In this scene, Falcon has been captured by the Helyx gang and is being harvested for her Amaranthine magic. Creative punctuation has been used to fit into the eight sentences.
With one last awful gurgle, Scar stopped struggling and slumped against the wall.
I stood over him, blood trailing from the corners of his eyes, his mouth, lines raked into his neck where he had try to claw the blood out–I had done this, this horrid, violent thing.
I had boiled a man from the inside out, without touching him.
I balled my hands into fists to stop them from shaking–Blood snaked down my arms, mirroring the lines that glowed silver-blue with Amaranthine.
I stared down at my hands–They had done this, I had done this. I grinned–My magic wasn’t useless after all.
It was deadly.
I turned and ran, leaving my victim slumped against the wall.
There you have it! Thanks so much for all the support over break, and I look forward to being back this summer 🙂 Until next time, happy 8sunday!
Blog Post and Novel Excerpt © Victoria Davenport and the Coffee.Write.Repeat. blog
11 thoughts on “Weekend Writing Warriors”
Well, if you must leave us for a few months, at least you’ve gone out with a bang. Wow. This bit especially is just made out of awesome: “I grinned–My magic wasn’t useless after all.
It was deadly.”
I love how the character seems sort of freaked out by what they’ve done and then you flip it. I am going to assume with a name like scar, he got what he deserved.
Well all RIGHT. YES! I’m so glad she rescued herself, even if it was a bit unpleasant for her. Best wishes on Spring semester – we’ll miss you!
You can only push someone so far, when they push back…. great stuff.
I absolutely love this scene 🙂 Even with this little tidbit the character’s voice is strong, and you get a feel for them . Very nice!
~ Liza @ Classy Cat Books
fantastic way to end. good luck this semester and cant wait for summer when you return
You’re leaving us on a great note. Great imagery that conveys anguish and rage. Great job! All the best this semester!
Well done on Falcon’s anguish and voice to a satisfying resolution. All the best to you! 🙂
I love the way you detail her reaction to a very violent and visceral deed. Nicely done!
Thanks for letting us see her get free. You’ll be missed, Victoria! Best of luck with the next semester!
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