Hey all! It’s been a long time, but I am finally on Christmas break and I’m so excited to be able to join in again for a little while 🙂 I thought I would share some snippets from my manuscript Ember, which is out on submissions now. You can read my previous WeWriWa snippets here. To meet some new authors, read some great writing, or join in the 8-sentence fun, stop by at Weekend Writing Warriors!
In this scene, Falcon has been lured and captured by the Helyx gang and wakes up being harvested for her Amaranthine magic. Creative punctuation has been used to fit into the eight sentences.
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Pain snapped me back into awareness.
A scream tore from my throat at the fire lacing its way up my arm–I opened my eyes to find a Helyx tracing the lines in my skin with his knife. I thrashed against my bonds, and the knife jolted across my arm, taking strips of flesh as it went.
A man watched from the end of the room, his eyes wicked in the flicker of candle-light–A scar ran from his forehead to his jaw, revealing him as the leader of the Helyx gang, Scar. “Stop,” he said to the boy cutting my arm, “I want to talk with her.”
He stopped–The blade dripped blood onto the floor in fat drops. My fists curled, my nails dug into my palms to fight the pain in my arm.
“Didn’t think you would see me again, did you Pet?” Scar taunted with a grin.
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There you have it! The next few posts will continue this scene, so I hope you come back next week. I’m looking forward to reconnecting with y’all and reading all the great posts this week! Happy 8sunday 🙂
Blog Post and Novel Excerpt © Victoria Davenport and the Coffee.Write.Repeat. blog
Hey! Hello, Victoria! So good to see you. 🙂
This snippet is downright scary. It tugs at a real fear–of being held in bonds and having pain inflicted. Being “harvested.” Just the thought is shudder-worthy.
Best wishes on the submission!
I didn’t post this week. Busy with holiday prep. Merry Christmas!!
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Good to see you too 🙂 Thank you so much! That’s too bad, but Merry Christmas to you too!
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Man, I missed your excerpts, Victoria. Chilling, visceral, darkly poetic. This is a thoroughly engaging snippet, and almost perfectly written. Fabulous job!
Happy Holidays!
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Oh, thank you so much 🙂 I really appreciate it. Happy holidays to you too!
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I felt her anguish, and you described this scene well. i hope she finds a way out of this mess. Great to see you back. I won’t be on W.W.W. after this week until sometime in January. Good luck with this submissions!
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Thank you so much! Its good to be back 🙂 Aw, thats too bad. But thank you!
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I meant that in a good way. I just feel like i’m lagging behind because i havent finished my stories.
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Dismiss my last comment, i was thinking about something else. I’ll miss w.w.w. but i need some time off.
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Nice to see you around! Love the descriptiveness of this excerpt- it’s very vivid and chilling.
Best of luck with the submissions!
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Thanks its nice to be back! Thank you very much 🙂 fingers crossed!
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Good to see you again, Victoria. Another great snippet with fantastic description. Love the name “Scar” for the Helyx leader. Happy Holiday! 🙂
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Thanks, its good to be back! Thank you 🙂 happy holidays!
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Welcome back! Wow, what a wonderful/horrible snippet. As always, your writing is awesome. Good luck with the submission process.
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Good to be back! Haha thank you 🙂 and thanks! Fingers crossed
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Good to see you back! That was one intense excerpt….SO well described. Great 8!
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Thank you so much! Good to be back 🙂
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I don’t like this Scar. Can we kill him off? Pretty please?
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Haha! Youll just have to keep reading and find out.. 🙂
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What a way to leave an impression? I’m sure “Pet” won’t forget him. Well done!
Keep smiling,
Yawatta
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That is just… *shudder*
I think she hoped never to see him again, for sure.
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